Talofa there bloggers,!
In room 9 we have been doing narritive writing this term. How we got into our narritive writing we had to look at videos of narrtive writing before we did it beacuse we wouldn't understand it at first. One of my favourite sentences was I screamed so loud like hundred of billons were popping every bit of voice. One thing I would inprove it is it should of put more describing
\I hope you enjoi the hoildays!
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FANTASTIC story Jailah.Your use of words have made your story powerful.Well done.I really enjoyed reading your learning.
ReplyDeleteDid you and Dolly have a freshly baked cookie?.
I know I would of had a one or two,maybe even 5.
I did notice that there are 2 parts of writing the same.Maybe you could check it and fix it for the next reader.
Have a great week.
Talofa Mrs Cassidy!,
DeleteThank you for commenting on my work! I hope you alo have a great week as always. I will go have a little cheak on my writing but thank you for reminding me to cheak it for others to read! I hope you enjoy your week at school!
Hello Jailah,
ReplyDeleteYour work was very amazing is this a story with you in it or another person?
I really like the describing words.My favourite sentence was "One sunny,hot day in 1995 in spring" it gives a bit of a picture in my mind.
Have a good day!